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01-20-2011, 07:28 AM
* Shot. Slam. Snort. Sniff.
* Searching, Seeking for a lift.
* Numb. Clear. Sharp. Changed.
* Innocent minds becoming deranged.
* Calm. Short. Crazy. Gone.
* What we once were against, We're happily on.
* Sick. Dark. Different. Mean.
* Chemical lusts subjecting our keen.
* Down. Up. Lost. Found.
* Reality ensuring that our minds stay bound.
* Heartache. Pain. Angst. Greed.
* Never before aware we could emotionally bleed.
* Guilty. Thoughtful. Hopeful. Dreaming.
* Sanity slowly slipping, Leaving.
* Empty. Shaken. Bruised inside.
* Desperately seeking answers to feed my starving mind.
* Placid, Crushing, Torn, Unfair.
* Keeping close, But far, From those who care.
* We create the unexplainable by way of being strange.
* Understanding progress can't begin without a change.
* Complexities of simple notions bring me to my end.
* Of the intricate and slightly skewed nonsense in my head.

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01-20-2011, 09:08 AM
Amazing. It's so ... powerful somehow. Well done :)

01-20-2011, 02:09 PM
After writing constantly for my whole life, My mother got sick and I stopped. This is the first thing I wrote 3 months after her death.

Cadmium Polyphony
01-20-2011, 10:01 PM
Is it alright to give constructive criticism on this?

01-24-2011, 10:42 PM
Sure. Always welcome.