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SweetOcarina
02-11-2011, 03:25 AM
Our Photographer who is part of our group is improving his photography. Taking your advice from last time to heart, we took some new shots. What do you think of these ones? Any critique?

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http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/029/4/6/you_can__not__advance_by_sweet_potato_ocarina-d38cdyg.jpg

Product Placement Photo advertising UCC Coffee

http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/030/a/3/cosplay__eva_loves_ucc_by_kazezakura-d38ez97.jpg

Watapachi <3

http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/039/b/6/luka_id_by_sweet_potato_ocarina-d390z85.jpg

Thank you~

Rander
02-14-2011, 09:06 PM
Photo #1:The composition is interesting, but what are the characters doing? It seems kind of random. If you just had Kaworu (I think) sitting down in the shot that would be good.

Photo #2:I think that this is a good set of pictures. The whole set looks a little desaturated, but I don't know if that was intended. I think the next step would be to add interesting shadows instead of lighting everyone evenly. There is a little bit of that going on in the first photo. Here are some examples (not mine)

http://hexlord.deviantart.com/#/d34ekk6
http://hexlord.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d38nrw8

Photo #3: I like it except the fence, its distracting. The foreground focus is good and you have good bokeh.

Hope this helps.

Ashurachan
02-15-2011, 03:09 AM
#1 has a nice concept, but you should have played with depth even more, and pushed the concept "everyone's looking in a different direction". Asuka and Shinji are too similar (and Asuka is partially hidden behind Shinji, which breaks the effect a bit).
I would have moved Kaworu closer to the camera, and probably Shinji too, and I'd have gotten him closer to the center, facing the camera and looking in its direction (but not at it).
Also, the sky looks a bit flat, I'd use a graduated filter to darken it, and give it more texture.

SweetOcarina
02-17-2011, 05:01 AM
Thank you so much for the critique guys!

Photo #1:The composition is interesting, but what are the characters doing? It seems kind of random. If you just had Kaworu (I think) sitting down in the shot that would be good.

The idea was based on the anime series, where in most official art the characters aren't looking at each other, but staring out into the unknown. Different version of their costumes but like so: http://www.absoluteanime.com/neon_genesis_evangelion/index-death_and_rebirth.jpg

Photo #2:I think that this is a good set of pictures. The whole set looks a little desaturated, but I don't know if that was intended. I think the next step would be to add interesting shadows instead of lighting everyone evenly. There is a little bit of that going on in the first photo. Here are some examples (not mine)

http://hexlord.deviantart.com/#/d34ekk6
http://hexlord.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d38nrw8

I should have probably explained. These are meant to be product placement/advertisement pictures. Ideally they would have all been identical lighting wise, but it didn't work out that way unfortunately. We didn't have access to a backdrop/lighting rig to make it even.

All the photos in the set were desaturated/muted on purpose.

Photo #3: I like it except the fence, its distracting. The foreground focus is good and you have good bokeh.

Hope this helps.

Thank you very much!

#1 has a nice concept, but you should have played with depth even more, and pushed the concept "everyone's looking in a different direction". Asuka and Shinji are too similar (and Asuka is partially hidden behind Shinji, which breaks the effect a bit).
I would have moved Kaworu closer to the camera, and probably Shinji too, and I'd have gotten him closer to the center, facing the camera and looking in its direction (but not at it).
Also, the sky looks a bit flat, I'd use a graduated filter to darken it, and give it more texture.

#1: Yeah I realised I was hidden. Unfortunately the versions of this shot where I'm not hidden there were people walking across the bridge. If we could take it again, I'd definitely stand further up the bridge. I'd also stop our Shinji from standing like such a dork and yeah, turning him towards the camera probably would have been a good idea.

Thanks for your critique!